J. Haux

I agree that this story has the potential to be expanded. What I'd like to clarify is whether this post is a story meant to stand alone, or if it ...

To answer your questions... Alex is intriguing. At least for a first chapter, the aura of mystery works--her cool demeanor, 'indestructibility'. I think though, that if she remains too cool ...

Hello order! This is my first critique of an essay, aside from my own essays for school, so bear with me! :wink: Writing essays is about communicating. So you have ...

Hi Jabber! (like your name, by the way! :wink:) A few years ago in my English class, when we were studying 'hooks', one of the ways was to start with ...

Happy/Merry Christmas! (And welcome to YWS!...a little late) I love a good Santa Clause poem. It distinctly reminded me of 'Twas the Night Before Christmas. I especially liked the burglar ...

Hello Rosethorn! When situations such as this arose, which they often did, he had learned the invaluable charm of patience. The best idea was to keep his mouth shut. Hold ...

It's like reading a incomplete novel. :wink: Your characters are believable, the dialogue's great, you have lovely imagery; it's engaging storytelling. And I am hooked! I've been in suspense waiting ...

Hey Searria! Heh heh...I remember this. Who knew Sasha was so evil...I always thought she liked the guinea pigs.You know I like this story--it's cute. :D Especially the way you ...

You know, I read this a while back, and I have been thinking about it fondly--but I just realized I never left a critique for you! I love the title--it ...

Right. Kardas, I said I would look for this, so here I am. :D There were some words and images in the beginning that I loved. His hand settled on ...

I read this before and didn't get a chance to comment. The interaction between Qatar and Al-Fayed made me chuckle both times, and I liked how you already introduced conflict ...

Harsh critiques, eh? Since you requested it, I'll do m'best. First, the little typos and such: Half way I'd put a hyphen in between, or make it one word. In ...

Wow, I see you've done a lot of work on this chapter. A lot of rewriting. I like this! :D Let me tell you first that you're a very good ...

I am you… your mind. Wow! Superb last line, bandhu! How true, too. :D I'm not very experienced with poetry either; I've never really tried it, but I've heard you ...

Did you make double spaces to make it look longer? Maybe that's just my trick! :lol: The format just looks unusual. It almost looks like you tried to make it ...